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"Everybody has a secret world inside of them. All of the people of the world, I mean everybody. No matter how dull and boring they are on the outside, inside them they've all got unimaginable, magnificent, wonderful, stupid, amazing worlds. Not just one world. Hundreds of them. Thousands maybe" ~ Neil Gaiman (A Game of You)

8.12.2010

Best of Bruce

"All right, all right," Louise said, fanning her face with her hands.  "I've got one.  Best movies by Bruce Willis."
"That's easy," said Samantha, bringing her glass of wine to her lips.  "Die Hard, his first break out role."
"Please, I hate those shows," Anneli said.  "Blow it up or shoot it up, no acting required.  How can that be the best?"
"It's just that he looked so good in those," Sam said with a pout.  "You know, before he went bald."
The women squealed.
"OK, I'll give you that," Louise said, "but he's still sexy, even without hair."
"I think his best role was Pulp Fiction," Anneli said.  "The boxer.  Still manly, still sexy, but finally showing some acting chops."
"Yeah, he was good, but you have to admit he was upstaged by John Travolta," said Sam.
"Finally, we had our Vinnie Barbarino back.  And he grew up so well, too," said Louise, smacking her lips.
"You still haven't told us your favorite, Louise," said Sam.  She took another drink and looked at her friend.
"Easy.  The 6th Sense.  It was so good, and so creepy.  The best kind of ghost story."
"Aw, he was such a good husband in that one, too.  So sad for the wife," said Anneli.  "All right, you're tempting me to change my mind."
"Wait.  I've got it.  We're wrong, we're all wrong."  Louise and Anneli looked at Sam.  Sam held a bread stick up for emphasis.
"Look Who's Talking.  Bam, hands down winner."
Everyone burst into laughter.
"Oh my gosh, that thing was so lame.  I could barely stand sitting through it," said Anneli.  "Please, tell me you didn't see Look Who's Talking, Too."
Sam raised her hand, shaking her head in confession.  "Yup.  I did.  Bruce Willis may have done all the talking, but John Travolta was the one looking good on the screen."
Louise sighed.  "I wouldn't mind having his baby."
"Whose?  Bruce's or John's?"
"Both," Louise said with a laugh.
"Well, I wouldn't," said Anneli.  Sam and Louise looked at her skeptically.
"No, seriously, can you imagine what kind of kid he would look like?  Why would I do that to my child?"  She smiled slyly.  "No, I think I'd rather my child look like Ashton Kutcher."


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   This week's prompt:  The conversation took off when Louise mentioned Bruce Willis.

To play along, visit Write Anything's [Fiction] Friday here.

19 comments:

Shelli said...

I hated the prompt, but loved the opportunity to practice dialogue. I would edit the heck out of this if it weren't against the rules -- add some of those gestures that ground you in the setting better. Ah, well, leave it for another day, I guess.

afullnessinbrevity said...

This is great dialogue as it felt so natural and flowed easily. At just the right moment, you brought in Look Whose Talking - genius.
Didn't do the prompt this week as I did my first Friday Flash.
Adam B @revhappiness

Carrie Dair said...

Another smooth piece Shelli. You may have hated the prompt, but that's where you've shown your writer muscles. Your dialogue was excellent. I understood every word and who was talking. Perfect. Natural flow too. Awesome! hee hee looks who's talking....that was so stupid. And Sam's right. John Travolta stole the show.

Carrie Dair said...

I meant the movie was stupid, not the line. That was a great comic throw in there. So random, too that it was perfect for the conversation!

Renee said...

I don't like to write dialogue either and thought this a strange prompt...but you did well with it~

Melissa said...

I liked the comedic approach you took with this and how you kept comparing him to John Travolta.

Shelli said...

Thank you, Adam. I'll have to come by and check out your Friday Flash.

Carrie -- Thanks! It turned out to be a lot of fun to write.

Renee -- I know, weird prompt, huh? Good chance to practice dialogue. Thank you.

Melissa -- Thank you, it was fun to just play with it this time around.

Laura Rachel Fox said...

I love the flow of the work. The dialog worked well and I like the comedic element.

Mei Yii said...

The dialogue's natural and I can easily imagine the characters having this conversation. :)

Jason Coggins said...

Yup, way to nail a conversation that has played out across the world a hundred thousand times. It rang true and I hope Bruce Willis Google's this flash fiction and agrees with you.

Scott said...

This was a good use of dialogue - sounds like people talk. You did a good job with several characters talking together - keeping it flowing without being confusing.

Shelli said...

Laura, Mei Yii, Jason, and Scott -- Thank you! It was a fun, fluff piece, but the practice was good for me, I think. And Jason, how funny, if Bruce Willis Googles himself and finds me. :)

newtowritinggirl said...

It's great you took the prompt and used it for something you wanted to do. The dialogue was very nautral sounding, I can totally imagine it being me and my frineds (although I don't think any of us fancy Bruce Willis...Ashton Kutcher though...)

Shelli said...

Thanks, NTWGirl. The Bruce Willis thing is what threw me off this week. But it was to fun to play around a bit.

Eric J. Krause said...

Good job on the dialog. It flowed well. One of my favorite Bruce Willis roles was Unbreakable. I thought he did great in that one.

Chris Chartrand said...

Well, it's been said already, but it's true-nice flowing dialog. I still think he was best in 'Moonlighting', but maybe that's just me.

Stacey said...

I liked the dialogue too, was a realistic interchange between friends. Like how a lot of us used the prompt to play with dialogue!

Shelli said...

Eric and Chris -- OK, I know I struck a realistic chord when my friends continue the conversation in the comments. :) My husband agrees with Unbreakable, but I didn't see it. He was fun in Moonlighting, but that wasn't a movie. Would have been fun to throw that in there, though.

Stacey -- Thanks very much, and yes, it seemed like the best way to use the prompt, didn't it?

John Pender said...

I like the little bit of comedy you inserted at the end. Weird prompt for sure, but well played.