tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6356166881256164183.post6050614560270225670..comments2023-11-14T01:13:04.914-08:00Comments on A*Musings: The Good HouseShellihttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03068094486297918345noreply@blogger.comBlogger20125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6356166881256164183.post-79762493029863624972010-08-02T21:14:16.002-07:002010-08-02T21:14:16.002-07:00Angela -- Thank you so much! I'm honored.
La...Angela -- Thank you so much! I'm honored.<br /><br />Laura -- Thank you! I'm glad you were able to feel the sense of inevitability. I'm looking forward to fleshing this story out some more. I think it has novel potential. :)Shellihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03068094486297918345noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6356166881256164183.post-81339758155952313182010-08-02T13:01:30.544-07:002010-08-02T13:01:30.544-07:00Great piece. I love how the tone changes from the...Great piece. I love how the tone changes from the ecstatic excitement of a new home and a new life in the beginning to a sinking dread in the end. Its as if your MC was meant to find this "treasure" in the attic, meant to be in Salem, and meant to be in this very house. There's so much potential for more story and I'd love to read more.Laura Rachel Foxhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05407312422139066511noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6356166881256164183.post-49009427963262042942010-08-01T13:11:46.104-07:002010-08-01T13:11:46.104-07:00Hey, Shelli, I have an award for your lovely blog ...Hey, Shelli, I have an award for your lovely blog <a href="http://jadedlovejunkie.blogspot.com/2010/07/making-up-for-lost-time.html" rel="nofollow">here</a>:)Angela McCallisterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10610798614001745001noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6356166881256164183.post-37838247111219333102010-08-01T10:39:06.819-07:002010-08-01T10:39:06.819-07:00Jon -- I did try a little foreshadowing with this ...Jon -- I did try a little foreshadowing with this piece. You're the first one to pick up on the baby connection. :) Thanks for your comments.<br /><br />Walt -- Mummified, as in her skin was shrunken and preserved, but not necessarily wrapped. And I was thinking premie, maybe? We'll see where my imagination takes it! Thanks for your comments, and your tweet.<br /><br />Anastasia -- Thanks! First person POV is still a little experimental for me. I'm glad it worked for you.<br /><br />Melissa -- Thank you! I'm glad the tone was communicated.Shellihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03068094486297918345noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6356166881256164183.post-34575451378901695262010-08-01T06:47:12.340-07:002010-08-01T06:47:12.340-07:00Very well written. I loved how the main character ...Very well written. I loved how the main character and the drawing had similar features. Like it could be a past life. I liked the spooky factor.Melissahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06488832373580617482noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6356166881256164183.post-3949296485923604822010-08-01T04:48:55.089-07:002010-08-01T04:48:55.089-07:00As soon as I read Salem I was expecting something ...As soon as I read Salem I was expecting something to do with the witch trials but the twist caught me by surprise! I found it really easy to get into the MC's mind, it flowed nicely.Staceyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16675799736197726920noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6356166881256164183.post-36551872063640984202010-08-01T02:40:26.712-07:002010-08-01T02:40:26.712-07:00You really drew me in with this one. The build-up ...You really drew me in with this one. The build-up had a soft and flowing feel to it while the tension mounted at the end.<br /><br />I'm curious about the female figure. Since you describe the box as being about the size of a shoe box, I'm curious as to what was wrapped like a mummy. Too small to be a child, maybe a doll, a figurine?<br /><br />Well doneWalthttp://www.waltinpa.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6356166881256164183.post-82889353966149672752010-07-31T19:45:53.595-07:002010-07-31T19:45:53.595-07:00Well, that was chilling. I knew nothing good would...Well, that was chilling. I knew nothing good would come of the attic as soon as you mentioned Salem.<br /><br />This flows so well, very natural. Now I am very worried about her baby.<br />~jonJ. M. Strotherhttp://www.jmstrother.com/MadUtopia/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6356166881256164183.post-2767261839596728842010-07-31T17:41:24.564-07:002010-07-31T17:41:24.564-07:00Thank you, Renee. I'm glad I was able to achi...Thank you, Renee. I'm glad I was able to achieve that effect. Tone and pace are tricky things.Shellihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03068094486297918345noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6356166881256164183.post-23794836448723320632010-07-31T10:50:41.203-07:002010-07-31T10:50:41.203-07:00I did not know the prompt, but just reading the fi...I did not know the prompt, but just reading the first couple of paragraphs...its tone or some vib made me feel apprenhensive...yet I wanted to keep reading....wow.....unnerving....<br />Great job once again. Now I need to forget about that scary attic find!Reneehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07089685282700680525noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6356166881256164183.post-64633595255389968052010-07-31T09:54:42.695-07:002010-07-31T09:54:42.695-07:00Angela and Susan -- Thank you! I did feel like th...Angela and Susan -- Thank you! I did feel like this was the beginning of something, rather than a stand alone story. I have so many possibilities dancing in my head!<br /><br />Carrie -- Thank you so much! That was exactly the kind of reaction I was hoping to evoke. Thank you for coming by to read. :)Shellihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03068094486297918345noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6356166881256164183.post-1415427038778664222010-07-31T06:36:06.172-07:002010-07-31T06:36:06.172-07:00Whoa.... I mean, whoa. Okay, not the most eloque...Whoa.... I mean, whoa. Okay, not the most eloquent evaluation I've given but I'm still kind of taking it all in. Fascinating, intriguing, terrifying, all at the same time. I do hope there's more, because already I'm afraid for her and wondering what happens next. Nice going Shelli. :)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6356166881256164183.post-44909155355182605492010-07-30T23:35:30.490-07:002010-07-30T23:35:30.490-07:00A great hook for a novel. Lots of things to ask q...A great hook for a novel. Lots of things to ask questions about.Susan G. Hawshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08149863824322299876noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6356166881256164183.post-24980222818230751102010-07-30T21:52:20.074-07:002010-07-30T21:52:20.074-07:00Chilling is right! You should work this idea into...Chilling is right! You should work this idea into a novel. I like the premise. Hehe, I want to read why the previous owner was so motivated!Angela McCallisterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10610798614001745001noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6356166881256164183.post-73087726012737500982010-07-30T21:27:12.327-07:002010-07-30T21:27:12.327-07:00John -- Thank you! This felt like a story I could...John -- Thank you! This felt like a story I could expand.<br /><br />Nikki -- Thank you, I do think I'm progressing a bit. :)<br /><br />Adam -- Thank you. I love loose ends, too, lots of possibilities you create on your own.<br /><br />Jason -- Thank you so much for the wonderful compliment! I appreciate that you came by to read, and I'm glad you enjoyed it.Shellihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03068094486297918345noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6356166881256164183.post-27713449278756373552010-07-30T20:28:15.511-07:002010-07-30T20:28:15.511-07:00Wow and thrice wow! I loved how the tone of this p...Wow and thrice wow! I loved how the tone of this piece turned from "isn't life lovely nest building" to something dark with the opening of the box. This was so well written and the transcript of the dialogue with the possessed was chilling. Excellent.Jason Cogginshttp://www.moultworld.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6356166881256164183.post-48436213721452464652010-07-30T19:07:50.859-07:002010-07-30T19:07:50.859-07:00Well told. I like loose threads; so many question...Well told. I like loose threads; so many questions to answerAdam Byatthttp://afullnessinbrevity.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6356166881256164183.post-39400844312236564002010-07-30T17:43:10.630-07:002010-07-30T17:43:10.630-07:00One of the most intriguing ones yet!One of the most intriguing ones yet!Nikki~Down syndrome Storytellerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10146299220600752628noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6356166881256164183.post-31117594341072168582010-07-30T17:11:14.844-07:002010-07-30T17:11:14.844-07:00I thought it was too short! I wanted it to keep go...I thought it was too short! I wanted it to keep going. <br />Good work, Shelli.John Penderhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15713403125655682082noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6356166881256164183.post-49393384943770493182010-07-30T15:06:54.123-07:002010-07-30T15:06:54.123-07:00Sorry, this was a little longer than usual! I wou...Sorry, this was a little longer than usual! I would have tightened it up a little and shortened it, but the rules are no editing.Shellihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03068094486297918345noreply@blogger.com