tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6356166881256164183.post1039738446962307149..comments2023-11-14T01:13:04.914-08:00Comments on A*Musings: AmelieShellihttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03068094486297918345noreply@blogger.comBlogger22125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6356166881256164183.post-4716908636042254552010-06-14T12:45:54.516-07:002010-06-14T12:45:54.516-07:00Thanks, Kim -- funny story. My family safety moni...Thanks, Kim -- funny story. My family safety monitoring blocks my mom's blog, but let's me go to viagra.com, no problem. What the??? I like to Tweet some of the funny e-mail spam I get. It's hilarious.Shellihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03068094486297918345noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6356166881256164183.post-86658552353453797432010-06-13T19:56:41.001-07:002010-06-13T19:56:41.001-07:00Let me rephrase my last post. I get the spam stuf...Let me rephrase my last post. I get the spam stuff. 'my cousin sent me to this website. I love it!' Viagra.com. Gee, thanks. Oh brother!! LOL!!! I think I'm going to start a new blog post with all these stupid spam messages sent to try to get me to their pathetic site. I can't get any traffic to my site, so I'll send a stupid message to your site, in hopes that you'll come to my site. All I need is few more clicks and I win the prize!!! Gesh. So in honor of you, dear: My cousin recommended this site. I love it!! Viagra.com. :))kimhttp://kimkouski.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6356166881256164183.post-16184090033889430232010-06-13T19:16:56.782-07:002010-06-13T19:16:56.782-07:00Wow!! I think this is the beginning of a new story...Wow!! I think this is the beginning of a new story!! Keep going!!kimhttp://kimkouski.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6356166881256164183.post-30430995164250517302010-06-12T18:40:42.582-07:002010-06-12T18:40:42.582-07:00Thank you, Annie and Claire, I appreciate that you...Thank you, Annie and Claire, I appreciate that you came by to visit. And yes, Annie, your piece is well worth visiting!Shellihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03068094486297918345noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6356166881256164183.post-20949275202740159322010-06-12T02:34:52.951-07:002010-06-12T02:34:52.951-07:00What a compelling piece, I need to go and hug my k...What a compelling piece, I need to go and hug my kids now.Claire - Gratitude Connectionhttp://www.gratitudeconnection.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6356166881256164183.post-22214007654688008022010-06-07T06:31:40.425-07:002010-06-07T06:31:40.425-07:00I defiantly have tears in my eyes with this one.. ...I defiantly have tears in my eyes with this one.. struck a real nerve with me. <br />beautifully told - loved the childishness of the beginning - but as Amelia grew in strength and responsibility over a few hours - so too the writing strengthened, became more robust... excellent piece<br />visitors can pop over and see mine here <br /><br />http://annieevett.blogspot.com/2010/06/of-lawnmowers-bowties-and-blowflies.htmlAnonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01308937047474819914noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6356166881256164183.post-43957423918658989152010-06-06T21:15:52.774-07:002010-06-06T21:15:52.774-07:00Thank you, NewToWritingGirl, that was the effect I...Thank you, NewToWritingGirl, that was the effect I was going for, torn sympathies. And yes, I remember that story you did -- you definitely did well capturing the emotion of that piece. Like you, I found that focusing on the quotidian details emphasized the loss. Thanks for coming by!Shellihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03068094486297918345noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6356166881256164183.post-72688377003222576992010-06-06T14:58:18.699-07:002010-06-06T14:58:18.699-07:00I really want to cry now – first with Walt’s piece...I really want to cry now – first with Walt’s piece and now this. I can’t work out who I feel for the most, the mum or the girl. Wow. I don’t know if you remember the piece I did weeks ago about the wife dying and the husband not knowing? Well my aim for that was the exact emotion you just produced in me! Great story.NewToWritingGirlhttp://newtowritinggirl.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6356166881256164183.post-90529424655062482462010-06-05T09:15:10.814-07:002010-06-05T09:15:10.814-07:00Thank you, Terry, and your opinion is worth a lot ...Thank you, Terry, and your opinion is worth a lot to me! Since Laura's comment, that's the debate I'm having with myself. I'll have to play with it and see which has the most emotional impact.<br /><br />I so appreciate the feedback!Shellihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03068094486297918345noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6356166881256164183.post-87566571104417394032010-06-05T03:06:20.516-07:002010-06-05T03:06:20.516-07:00Very touching and heartbreaking. I actually liked...Very touching and heartbreaking. I actually liked the opening line about becoming an adult at seven years old when her father died. You could leave out the part about her mom but I think it needs that opening line about her and the father's death. That is my opinion for what it is worth.Terry Haferkamphttp://terryhaferkamp@sbcglobal.netnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6356166881256164183.post-65661819061998043882010-06-04T19:37:13.624-07:002010-06-04T19:37:13.624-07:00Thank you, Laura -- that's an interesting thou...Thank you, Laura -- that's an interesting thought. I do see how I could eliminate the first paragraph and go right into the funeral. I'll mull that if I go further with it. :)Shellihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03068094486297918345noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6356166881256164183.post-39001690489898474772010-06-04T18:35:40.510-07:002010-06-04T18:35:40.510-07:00A beautiful, sad story. I too would like to see t...A beautiful, sad story. I too would like to see this play out, through heartache and pleasures. <br /><br />You may want to cut the opening line: "Amelie became an adult when she was seven years old. That's also when her daddy died and her mommy stopped being a mom." Just my opinion, but as a reader I would like to come to this conclusion on my own and your story is so well written that I believe I would have.Laura Rachel Foxhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05407312422139066511noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6356166881256164183.post-44562684212991164062010-06-04T18:27:27.191-07:002010-06-04T18:27:27.191-07:00Thank you John, Adam, and Walt. I think if I were...Thank you John, Adam, and Walt. I think if I were to take it further, I would focus on her resiliency. Kids are amazing that way.Shellihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03068094486297918345noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6356166881256164183.post-76263411287054441642010-06-04T18:17:23.114-07:002010-06-04T18:17:23.114-07:00This was a sad story. I could feel for the mother ...This was a sad story. I could feel for the mother and her tragic loss but to shut down and leave the children to fend for themselves is heartbreaking.<br /><br />Well done, thanks for sharingWalthttp://www.waltinpa.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6356166881256164183.post-87659953511696072682010-06-04T16:27:51.404-07:002010-06-04T16:27:51.404-07:00Quite a poignant story, one that I'm sure is r...Quite a poignant story, one that I'm sure is repeated far too often in our world. Well told.<br />Blessings<br />Adam BAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6356166881256164183.post-31259230752809551912010-06-04T16:25:47.724-07:002010-06-04T16:25:47.724-07:00Unfortunately, it seems a lot of first-born are fo...Unfortunately, it seems a lot of first-born are forced to grow up in such a fashion nowadays. Good work.John Penderhttp://johnpender.netnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6356166881256164183.post-36311552122448179242010-06-04T14:24:13.876-07:002010-06-04T14:24:13.876-07:00Why, Renee, we do know what happened to her -- she...Why, Renee, we do know what happened to her -- she grows up to be a wonderful and inspiring woman who has the kindest heart and loves to help others. OK, if I flesh this out, I'll have to lead her on a rocky road to get there, but we're all familiar with that rocky road, aren't we? And thank you so much for your wonderful comments.Shellihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03068094486297918345noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6356166881256164183.post-68241527393006157532010-06-04T13:56:58.455-07:002010-06-04T13:56:58.455-07:00Oh, Shelli...this is absolutely amazing. I have te...Oh, Shelli...this is absolutely amazing. I have tears in my eyes from reading this...some of it touched a nerve for me. I too want to know more...what her to be okay...want her mom to get out of bed! <br />I was 7 when my dad died and my sister left home. I became the mom ome of the time after that....but taking care of my mother and myself, not other children. This really opened up a place in my heart...You are a FANTASTIC writer! Fiction writing is definitely a gift God has blessed you with.Reneehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07089685282700680525noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6356166881256164183.post-56542572075108010902010-06-04T13:21:59.485-07:002010-06-04T13:21:59.485-07:00Thanks Nikki! =)Thanks Nikki! =)Shellihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03068094486297918345noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6356166881256164183.post-104662814768774482010-06-04T10:49:15.841-07:002010-06-04T10:49:15.841-07:00I agree with Karen. Wow.I agree with Karen. Wow.Nikki~Down syndrome Storytellerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10146299220600752628noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6356166881256164183.post-31617488315542603352010-06-04T10:48:22.776-07:002010-06-04T10:48:22.776-07:00Karen, every aspiring writer should have you as a ...Karen, every aspiring writer should have you as a friend! Thank you so much, you are way too kind. And you know, that's one thing I love about these writing prompts -- you build up a little vault of awesome ideas that you could turn into a bigger story someday.Shellihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03068094486297918345noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6356166881256164183.post-79321790800838684242010-06-04T10:43:32.727-07:002010-06-04T10:43:32.727-07:00OH MY HEAVENS! This is just the START of a beauti...OH MY HEAVENS! This is just the START of a beautiful tale, right? I want to know what happens next. You sucked me in so powerfully I thought it was real. I wanted to cry with the Mom as much as I did the little girl. What a loss and what a powerful telling Shelli. I mean, Oh my gosh! Way to go!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com